As the story told itself, it switched around some on the actual prompt, but that’s okay. I let it go where it wanted to go. Let the speaker use his own voice which is nothing like mine. And nothing like my normal writing. But it was fascinating to watch the words flow.
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It ain’t easy. That much is for sure. Been a long time since I killed anything but back in the day….. yeah…. back in the day…..
It came for me when I was 15. Thought I was tough then, I did. Big swagger as I walked down the street. Tough words. Angry words. Ugly words. Funny how when you’re young you think those things make you tough. Don’t take me wrong. I was a scrapper. I’d been in any number of street fights. All my life. Thought that made me tough, too. How little I knew.
It came on a Monday. I was home. Had to be. My little sister was there. Didn’t like to leave her alone at night. Not if I could help it. We had day-old hot dogs for dinner. A dented can of baked beans. Marshmellow fluff.
Lived in a series of rooms. Used to be offices when the building was a warehouse. One central room with a hotplate, couple broke-back chairs. A table. A radio. Another room with two mattresses on the floor. A bathroom that worked. Barely. But enough for water to clean and cook. I’d installed locks on the doors. Kept us safe so far. Then again, I wasn’t asleep yet.
Been years now. Too many. Never did find my little sister. I looked for her sometimes. All the times. That face in the crowd. A voice across a street. A dream of before I’d become a monster. But now… now I am old. Haven’t killed in years.
Weren’t killing that’d made me a monster. No. Abandoning her did. Ran when the Government people finally tracked us down. Gonna take us into the system. Foster homes. Schools. The ‘right’ life. Couldn’t take that. And so I ran.
She screamed. Begged. Tears. Never did forget that. Never did forget the sound of tears. Sound rang in my ears the rest of my days. Still there now. But it’s gonna be gone soon.
Soon. Another breath. Two. Another tear. I’ll no longer be a monster.
Great story! I like the flow and pacing of it, I also love how the settings are described .Well done and thanks for following my blog!
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I’m hooked. Genius.
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Thank you. Dancing some more on clouds. I really appreciate your visits, your kind words – and suggestions.
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Why thank you. Glad you enjoyed it.
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Going to re-post some of my favorites blogs as the year draws to a close.
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I like the story, the pacing from then to now, the clear descriptions and the humanness of the monster.
Thank you for following my blog. I look forward to reading more from you.
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Thank you and welcome! I love hearing comments about my writing because it makes me look at the piece in a different way.
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I relate to comments/feedback about ones writing as an opportunity to look at a piece in a different way.
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This is very good!
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Thanks. Glad you stopped by.
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My pleasure!
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Excellent piece. It definitely kept my attention.
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Thank you.
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Great use of words it me intrigued wanting more.
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Thank you so much. Glad you came by.
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Thanks so much!
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This is sad.
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Yes, but there is also some hope in there somewhere.
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Really drew my heart in.
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Thanks for coming by for a read!
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Hi. Enjoyed “Monster.” Like what you said about letting the story go its way and how it’s “fascinating to watch the words flow.” Really cool.
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Keep up the great work!
Lord Bless, Keep, Shine. . .
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Thank you.
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Powerful.
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Hi, athling2001, I saw you have been catching up with my blogs so I decided to come check you out some more. Glad I did because I had never read this. It is so poignant and powerful. And written with such an appropriate style for this content. Great story. 😀
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Thanks so much.
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Ridiculous story there. What happened after? Good luck!
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